Thursday, September 10, 2015

PLN 2 with Ashley

Summary Response Outline

  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
Act one of The tragedy of Othello, by William Shakespeare proves that people often have underlying intentions contrasting what they outwardly portray, looks are deceiving and friends don’t always have others best interests at heart.

  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
In the concluding pages of act 1, Iago describes how he is playing the other characters, using them to get what he wants. He is playing Roderigo, Cassio, and Othello. All these characters see Iago in the way that he portrays himself to them, none of Iago's pawns are exposed to the real Iago or his true intentions.

  • Explanation of ideas
In the concluding lines of act one, Iago outwardly expresses his two faced intentions to the reader by portraying friendship towards Othello then going behind Othello’s back and verbally sharing his hatred for Othello to Roderigo.

  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
William Shakespeare demonstrates the evilness behind the idea of betrayal and the fact that people may have two faces. Othello highlights the concept that physical appearance as well as first intentions are not how you should judge someone, and that one’s personal view of their acquaintance may contrast that person’s true intentions.

  • Topic sentence: Act 1 of Othello by William Shakespeare demonstrates the contrast between people’s intentions and their public image, or first impressions.
  • Claim 1: Iago is betraying both Othello and Roderigo by seemingly portraying his trust to both, but talking trash about each of them behind their backs.
    • Set-up- When Othello and Iago enter theDuke’s counsel, Iago is reassuring Othello that he will be able to win Brabantio’s approval of his marriage to Desdemona. In other words, Iago is essentially acting as a friend to Othello and falsely presenting his trust to him.
    • Evidence: Lead-in- As Iago is continuing to act as a friend to Othello, he encourages him by saying  “Those are the raised father and his friends. You were best to go in.” (Shakespeare 1.2. 33-34)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim- Iago is reassuring Othello that he will get his desired outcome and is filling Othello with positive thoughts. By doing this Iago is expressing camaraderie towards Othello which is contrasting what Iago later says when he is alone. Iago is assessing his situation involving Othello by himself when he bitterly states “But for my sport and profit, I hate the Moor.” (shakespeare 1.3. 429)  William Shakespeare is using dramatic irony here to reveal Iago’s two faces to the reader because the reader is able to see Iago indicate friendship to Othello, then watch Iago go and express his true feelings of hatred towards him.

  • Counterclaim 1: However, .... Although it may seem like Iago is pure evil, one might consider that Iago does have everyone's best interests at heart. He demonstrates a consistent effort to please everyone, it is not uncommon to see the good in Iago despite his outward evilness.

    • Set-up:
Iago talks Roderigo out of suicide, potentially proving that beneath his layers, Iago does have a good heart with positive intent.

    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation”
When Roderigo expresses his desires to drown himself, Iago talks him out of it saying, “come, be a man! Drown thyself? Drown blind puppies and cats.” (1.3 375-380 Shakespeare.)

    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
Shakespeare portrays the good in Iago, when Iago convinces Roderigo not to drown himself. Iago considers Roderigo a friend and therefor does what any good friend should do, supports him and discourages him when he talks of killing himself.

  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Use the rebuttal progression
Many think that Iago does has people’s best interest in mind and is a trustworthy person. After all Iago has not directly caused harm to anyone and did try and talk Roderigo out of suicide. This position seems reasonable at first glance, however at closer glance Iago’s true intentions slowly start to reveal themselves. The only reason Iago is talking Roderigo out of suicide is to aid his own plans and not at all for the sake of his friend’s well-being. Iago is setting multiple people up for failure by portraying false trust to their faces then going behind their back and doing things that will, in the long run, cause them harm.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Overall, Iago is a bestil menacing personality who has strictly evil intentions, he is not just two faced but many faced, and is a friend to no one. This proves that first impressions and looks are not good things to base judgements off of. It proves that people aren't always what they seem, and someone's outward portrayal of themselves doesn't always duplicate who they truly are.

1 comment:

  1. Good start to your summary. Make sure to punctuate the title correctly and focus on one main idea for your topic sentence. Make sure your concluding sentence is one sentence as well.

    I don't see a position and a why in your response topic sentence. Make sure to follow the Response topic sentence format.

    Good set-up of quotations. Make sure the period goes after the citation " (Shakespeare ).

    We really need to use strong verbs throughout. You use a lot of is + ing verbs; just use the present tense form of the verb. For example, rather than "Iago is expressing camaraderie" just state Iago expresses camaraderie. Does that make sense?

    Make sure all your citations are of the correct format. You need to use the MLA format given in class.

    Additionally, make sure to proofread as you have a lot of run on sentences because of too much comma usage. Write in complete sentences.

    Good rebuttal- keep pushing the argument and your claim forward at the end. Make sure your concluding sentence is one sentence.

    You have a lot of good elements, but need to spend more time on this.